That was indeed a good read and I usually cant stand any story which goes beyond 5 chapters as they tend to drag too much, but this time I couldnt wait to read the next. I thought it really creative as how Riza got the scar on the array on her back. I liked how you inserted links to the clothes and furniture, really makes the scene a lot easier to imagine, seeing that it's set in a differnt time period. Good job. All the best for the competition.