ext_15134 ([identity profile] evil-little-dog.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] cornerofmadness 2009-02-24 04:20 am (UTC)

Very...scary, that last bit.

Edits! Roy heard Ed yelp, his arm erupting in sparks as a bullet tore into it A raw scream tore out of the Edward’s throat as Alphonse hit ground,

(period after "into it")

(Alphonse hit "the" ground)

If they survive this, Winry and Riza will kill them ALL.

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