Still about the writing
May. 12th, 2016 11:12 pmAnd how I messed up. OH how I messed up and it's all my fault. You can read part of the fiasco here.
What I couldn't put there is this. Yes I should have reread Crisis in Faith. I can fix the problems easily enough but that isn't the big issue for me. I was stunned at just how BAD this story is. I mean it's so bad I'd be tempted to tell them to take it down but it's been on sale for six years so what's the point?
Now if they do buy Blood Red I will ask to revamp Crisis. I can at least remove some of the issues like at one point Luc is mentioning five vampires when there are only four. I know who the fifth is. He was another Eleni victim from another story but that story died about 11 computers ago and who remembers what I was thinking in 1994? How did no one catch this?
Honestly the story feels like what it probably is: a very young company buying up anything remotely sellable. It couldn't have been edited hard.
Another thing that's changed since 2010, the no epithet rule. I think this rule was made for ME because of THIS story. I mean why use Luc, Arrigo and Siobhan when I can constantly call them The Cajun, the elder vampire, the Irish woman.... Not just once or twice to clue people in. No it's all the way thru this. YIKES. I could fix that, no problem.
But I've had to come up with why Fadil was never told about Eleni! Otherwise Arrigo looks like an idiot (and he was in the original. You can easily tell I was MUCH younger when I originally wrote this. I was in my 20s and it shows).
You can tell what I rewrote when I sold this as a Christmas story compared to the stuff that was obviously on my discs since 1994. And back then Luc and Arrigo were not a couple because you just couldn't do that then. (I mean that literally, I remember seeing articles warning you any LGBT stuff on your portfolio and you could kiss any chances of bigger publishers looking at you goodbye). So back in 1994 I had Luc have a one night stand because he was drunk and pissed at Arrigo.
And I didn't take it out. And DSP didn't make me take it out. And it's never even addressed not even in Luc's head. He goes right back to Arrigo's bed without even feeling guilty. Now Arrigo doesn't know about the one night stand but Luc doesn't even think twice about it. THIS is what upsets me about the story. I had forgotten that. I could change it by removing one line but that would be dishonest.
I have no real idea what to do about it. At least it's proof the person who told me my writing never grows one iota was so very wrong.
And in the back of my head I wonder if people are judging me by this story. Because it sells more than anything else I write probably because it's a stand alone short story hence cheap. It's an introduction to me and it's a poor one. I'm not sure Snowbound is much better. Sigh.
Speaking of writing I did manage to get my story up on
fma_fic_contest so that made me happy.
I'm about 2/3rds through The Raven King and without spoilers I will say I'm enjoying it but on the other hand the focus on finding Glendower seems even more lost than it was last book. Also this is very very shippy which I suppose isn't too much of a shock since this is where we find out if they can save Gansey or not. I forgot to mention one tween had made a t-shirt that said 'The Save Gansey book tour 2016' and was so excited Maggie took a picture of it she was nearly incoherent with aggressive posturing.
I have proven that my task chair is in part contributing to my intense pain. I was away from here from friday-tuesday and my pain was nearly 100% gone including that mystery side pain. In less than two days the side pain is back, my hip pain is back and the knife to the groin pain is back. whee.
and there are little brown piss ants everywhere. Driving me nuts.
What I couldn't put there is this. Yes I should have reread Crisis in Faith. I can fix the problems easily enough but that isn't the big issue for me. I was stunned at just how BAD this story is. I mean it's so bad I'd be tempted to tell them to take it down but it's been on sale for six years so what's the point?
Now if they do buy Blood Red I will ask to revamp Crisis. I can at least remove some of the issues like at one point Luc is mentioning five vampires when there are only four. I know who the fifth is. He was another Eleni victim from another story but that story died about 11 computers ago and who remembers what I was thinking in 1994? How did no one catch this?
Honestly the story feels like what it probably is: a very young company buying up anything remotely sellable. It couldn't have been edited hard.
Another thing that's changed since 2010, the no epithet rule. I think this rule was made for ME because of THIS story. I mean why use Luc, Arrigo and Siobhan when I can constantly call them The Cajun, the elder vampire, the Irish woman.... Not just once or twice to clue people in. No it's all the way thru this. YIKES. I could fix that, no problem.
But I've had to come up with why Fadil was never told about Eleni! Otherwise Arrigo looks like an idiot (and he was in the original. You can easily tell I was MUCH younger when I originally wrote this. I was in my 20s and it shows).
You can tell what I rewrote when I sold this as a Christmas story compared to the stuff that was obviously on my discs since 1994. And back then Luc and Arrigo were not a couple because you just couldn't do that then. (I mean that literally, I remember seeing articles warning you any LGBT stuff on your portfolio and you could kiss any chances of bigger publishers looking at you goodbye). So back in 1994 I had Luc have a one night stand because he was drunk and pissed at Arrigo.
And I didn't take it out. And DSP didn't make me take it out. And it's never even addressed not even in Luc's head. He goes right back to Arrigo's bed without even feeling guilty. Now Arrigo doesn't know about the one night stand but Luc doesn't even think twice about it. THIS is what upsets me about the story. I had forgotten that. I could change it by removing one line but that would be dishonest.
I have no real idea what to do about it. At least it's proof the person who told me my writing never grows one iota was so very wrong.
And in the back of my head I wonder if people are judging me by this story. Because it sells more than anything else I write probably because it's a stand alone short story hence cheap. It's an introduction to me and it's a poor one. I'm not sure Snowbound is much better. Sigh.
Speaking of writing I did manage to get my story up on
I'm about 2/3rds through The Raven King and without spoilers I will say I'm enjoying it but on the other hand the focus on finding Glendower seems even more lost than it was last book. Also this is very very shippy which I suppose isn't too much of a shock since this is where we find out if they can save Gansey or not. I forgot to mention one tween had made a t-shirt that said 'The Save Gansey book tour 2016' and was so excited Maggie took a picture of it she was nearly incoherent with aggressive posturing.
I have proven that my task chair is in part contributing to my intense pain. I was away from here from friday-tuesday and my pain was nearly 100% gone including that mystery side pain. In less than two days the side pain is back, my hip pain is back and the knife to the groin pain is back. whee.
and there are little brown piss ants everywhere. Driving me nuts.
