another rejection to paper my walls with
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cornerofmadness Power to Endure didn't sell but then again I'm NOT shocked. For one, it was written quickly and frankly it spooled out in such a way it really feels like the first half of a novel and not a complete novella. HOWEVER, Loose ID (online publisher) sent me a very good rejection letter.
We know that you have loved and labored over your manuscript for months, even years. We’re thrilled that, in looking for a home for Power to Endure, you thought of Loose Id. Thank you for trusting us with your creation.
An editor and one member of our management team have reviewed Power to Endure. A very good and entertaining romp in space! It's always interesting to watch a man's passion and convictions turn from those of evil to that of good, from a family business of gun running to a business of supplying medicine to help humanity.
Regretfully, we don’t feel your story is right for us at this time. You have done an amazing job; completing a manuscript is an incredible feat, in and of itself. Your manuscript, however, has too much telling and not enough showing. Also, Loose Id readers have come to expect a certain level of eroticism in their novels, which correlates into a lot more—and more explicit—sex than Power to Endure currently has.
We hope that you will continue to work on Power to Endure to delve deeper into POV and into the character's motivations. Since this is erotic romance, we'd also love to see more of Sotaria's POV. Just because we aren’t interested in acquiring your manuscript right now doesn’t mean we never will be, or that your work lacks merit.
We wish you the very best of luck in finding a home for Power to Endure and hope you will keep us in mind for future works.
So why am I showing you this? Those of us who have written and been rejected know one thing, it sucks to get that form rejection. This letter tells me WHY they didn't want it. The show not tell...i swear I'm not sure i'm that guilty of it but maybe. I KNEW they would want it from the female's pov. I guess you STILL can't write a romance from the man's pov. I also figured I might get dinged on the sex. Frankly even in erotica I don't want TONS of the sex. I'd rather get a story with one or two sex scenes. In my novella there was 2 and half scenes in 25K. But letters like this are helpful. I'll go look at the show and not tell thing (no one on the original fic filter called me on that). But really I think this might get shelved until I can novelize it.
ETA so darn close to 10K -
9985 / 50000 words. 20% done!
We know that you have loved and labored over your manuscript for months, even years. We’re thrilled that, in looking for a home for Power to Endure, you thought of Loose Id. Thank you for trusting us with your creation.
An editor and one member of our management team have reviewed Power to Endure. A very good and entertaining romp in space! It's always interesting to watch a man's passion and convictions turn from those of evil to that of good, from a family business of gun running to a business of supplying medicine to help humanity.
Regretfully, we don’t feel your story is right for us at this time. You have done an amazing job; completing a manuscript is an incredible feat, in and of itself. Your manuscript, however, has too much telling and not enough showing. Also, Loose Id readers have come to expect a certain level of eroticism in their novels, which correlates into a lot more—and more explicit—sex than Power to Endure currently has.
We hope that you will continue to work on Power to Endure to delve deeper into POV and into the character's motivations. Since this is erotic romance, we'd also love to see more of Sotaria's POV. Just because we aren’t interested in acquiring your manuscript right now doesn’t mean we never will be, or that your work lacks merit.
We wish you the very best of luck in finding a home for Power to Endure and hope you will keep us in mind for future works.
So why am I showing you this? Those of us who have written and been rejected know one thing, it sucks to get that form rejection. This letter tells me WHY they didn't want it. The show not tell...i swear I'm not sure i'm that guilty of it but maybe. I KNEW they would want it from the female's pov. I guess you STILL can't write a romance from the man's pov. I also figured I might get dinged on the sex. Frankly even in erotica I don't want TONS of the sex. I'd rather get a story with one or two sex scenes. In my novella there was 2 and half scenes in 25K. But letters like this are helpful. I'll go look at the show and not tell thing (no one on the original fic filter called me on that). But really I think this might get shelved until I can novelize it.
ETA so darn close to 10K -
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