IWRY B/A Marathon Story

[cornerofmadness]

Against all odd I DID finish this monster and thanks to evil_little_dog  and marenfic  for the edits and there's other copious thank you's to my Flist for their help with this. Note to any and all readers: because I'm participating in nanowrimo and have to churn out a 50,000 word novel in a month I did NOT have time to add in all the action and description to this story like my beta's (and I myself) wanted me to so consider this a WIP. It's done but it's rough. Just watch my LJ for an update for the polished work or if you're not on the Flist and want to know just drop me some feedback in the ol' comments box and I'll gladly let you know when it's done.

That part done, let me also say this is story #3 in the Brambles and Burrs series and there is no need to read the first two to get this one (what little backstory you need for this is in the author's notes) so without further ado here's The Thin Spun Life

Comments

[stephanierb.livejournal.com]

I really enjoyed that. While I'm looking forward to the polished version, I think you did a great job with the rough draft.

I can see Angel getting discouraged so easily, especially considering his success rate, or lack thereof, with relationships and with Buffy in particular. Despite his acknowledgement that he's been wrong in the past, Angel still hasn't broken that habit of not discussing things and then making decisions for other people. It was nice to see Connor be the one to give him the wake-up call.

Speaking of Connor, I loved the way you had him pestering Angel constantly. It was amusing and yet telling; that was the only way that Connor was capable of interacting with Angel. He wants to have a relationship with his father, but he just isn't ready to deal with their issues so he falls back on annoying him. It was funny and sad at the same time.

And I loved the B/A interaction. I truly believe that their intial reunion will be that awkward and that full of anxiety, fear and love. For someone who doesn't write them primarily, you do B/A very well.

[cornerofmadness.livejournal.com]

Thanks I'm glad you liked the story and all the elements I hoped would come together certainly seemed to for you. I think the next one in this series will be the father/son talk

[a2zmom.livejournal.com]

Lovely story. Yeah, I fully believe Angel's insecurities would get the best of him. Great interaction between Buffy, Connor and Angel.

They also would likely have movies in common - we already know that Angel has a secret thing for Indiana Jones. Plus dancing - maybe they could meet halfway and try out tap. Who doesn't like tap dancing?

[cornerofmadness.livejournal.com]

Trying to picture Angel tap dancing. OH the horror!

Yes I'm sure if Angel and BUffy sat and talk they'd find other things in common like movies. We know action movies appeal to Angel.

I'm glad you liked the story. COnnor was being such a brat.

[a2zmom.livejournal.com]

When isn't he being bratty for you?

I'd have a heart attack if he was my kid. There are some things a parent doesn't want to know. I believe in don't ask/don't tell when a kid is a certain age.

[cornerofmadness.livejournal.com]

Angel is still getting to that point. LIke I said to Maren when she betaed this thing and we were discussing what Connor knew about Nina. How WEIRD and CREEPY it was to have Connor speculating on Angel and Nina's sex life. Okay I know the writers wanted to have a father/son moment but WHAT kid wants to know about their parents sex life. Brrr

[thestranger1.livejournal.com]

This is maybe a rough draft but it's still great. I love the interaction between Angel, Buffy and Connor.

Angel giving up easily is very believable, and so is the way Connor keeps irritating his father in a way to interact with him.

I'm looking forward the complete version of this fic.

[cornerofmadness.livejournal.com]

Thanks. I'm so glad you liked it. Everyone seems to think that Angel's reactions are in character and they like the whole father son thing so I'm glad that even as a rough this is working. Thanks for the feed i appreciate it.

[fb2wendy.livejournal.com]

I just want to say how much I enjoyed this. The awkwardness of Buffy and Angel's dating, the rawness when it all came crashing down, the many, many wonderful character moments - it's a really good story. And this is a rough draft. I am eagerly awaiting the polished version.

[cornerofmadness.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much. I'm so glad it's working for everyone. As Stephanierb mentioned, B/A isn't my primary ship so when I get it right I'm always relieved.

[alleynyc.livejournal.com]

Awesome story. You do so well with the voices. Yummy.

[cornerofmadness.livejournal.com]

Thanks. I'm glad you liked it. I hope to flesh it out soon.