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cornerofmadnesswell the agent didn't take Machiavell Moon. However, he DID give me a lot of useful advice. One was the ending was too statacco and rushed (which a few of you pointed out but I guess I still haven't completely addressed the problem).
the other problem was he didn't understand why a player like Sulien didn't have a blackberry, lap top etc. Well i wrote this in 1994-95. Those things weren't common. Hell cell phones didn't work in South Dakota back then. So, i have two choices, purposely date this 1995 OR go through the whole novel and update it. I think i'll do the latter (and pray that i don't jinx a tension point or something doing that) I know i just did that in one of the early chapters instead of having Caksi run for the phone I gave him a cell.
Outside of a few clunky sentences, the other problem he had were my use of brand names...something I don't remember using but I'll be sure to go look for them (they date the novel which was his concern)
So..he didn't take it BUT to me this is still good news because the problems he had are NOT that hard to fix. I can catch all of them in one revision. He called it a good read and wants to see something else so go me.
What I really need is another good beta for it. I know some of you volunteered. Let me update the first four chapters then I'll open it up to offers of readers again (since i've forgotten who wanted to) When I do that, I'll screen the comments so you can give me an email for it.
the other problem was he didn't understand why a player like Sulien didn't have a blackberry, lap top etc. Well i wrote this in 1994-95. Those things weren't common. Hell cell phones didn't work in South Dakota back then. So, i have two choices, purposely date this 1995 OR go through the whole novel and update it. I think i'll do the latter (and pray that i don't jinx a tension point or something doing that) I know i just did that in one of the early chapters instead of having Caksi run for the phone I gave him a cell.
Outside of a few clunky sentences, the other problem he had were my use of brand names...something I don't remember using but I'll be sure to go look for them (they date the novel which was his concern)
So..he didn't take it BUT to me this is still good news because the problems he had are NOT that hard to fix. I can catch all of them in one revision. He called it a good read and wants to see something else so go me.
What I really need is another good beta for it. I know some of you volunteered. Let me update the first four chapters then I'll open it up to offers of readers again (since i've forgotten who wanted to) When I do that, I'll screen the comments so you can give me an email for it.
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